I'm not so sure about this one. I could try giving you some feedback
I feel like this way too cluttered, and it feels way more like noise than an actual song. It had a good melody in the beginning, but 0:51 just doesn't feel like a song. It kinda hurts my ears a bit, actually. I don't mean for this to come off as a rude comment but in the future, please make sure your songs sound like actual songs, and not like.. that.